Entry #17: Oblivion (Quiet Thoughts)
- Quiet-Emerald
- Nov 3, 2019
- 1 min read
I’m trapped. My legs won’t obey me. My eyes open windows into a parallel reality that feels like a dream though I am awake. The backs of my eyes feel heavy and sluggish. I fight the sensation with little strength I have. The distance of a few steps is that of a hundred miles. A daunting and challenging journey to get to where I want to go. The light of a thousand false suns burn my eyelids. The pale glimmer of the true sun yields only discomfort. The cold wind bites at my fingers. It feels like the only thing that I can feel, the only thing that feels real. Arms at home remain closed, denying me an embrace that I once had wished for. No companion walks with me through this forest of concrete. I have no one close to me. I have no one to see who I am. I’m completely lost, swirling and drowning in a void of fear and illogical worries. My thoughts manifest like chains, wrapping around my legs, dragging me further into the unknown. My lips agape, frozen in a silent scream, welcoming the black fluid of the abyss into my lungs. I’m drowning. Yet I live. In agony. In torment. There’s no end in sight, and I must go on. I’m a soul inhabiting a lifeless corpse, marching to oblivion with each step I take. Marching in defiance of the tyrannous stars. I must go on.
@dave.phone I'm glad that it flows naturally and makes sense. lol. I always worry when I write my thoughts down that at times it can seem a bit hectic or chaotic. Also, sorry for the late reply. I didn't get any emails that notified me for some reason, plus that with university, my mind has been quite busy.
I think you should try writing. It's nice. You don't have to have a fancy vocabulary or anything. Just write what you feel. Plus you can always brush up on reading when you can and whatnot.
Yeah I just read it again and it's even more powerful this time. You can really feel a lot of emotion went into it. And it flows very naturally. Like it's your thoughts and feelings transcribed from your mind to words as you journeyed through your day. This makes me want to try writing.. I did a little a long time ago and I enjoyed it.. but my vocabulary is seriously lacking nowadays.. I don't read enough anymore :)
@dave.phone Thank you, I'm glad you liked it. I put a lot of emotion and feeling into it, and the words just sort of flowed out. I really appreciate the feedback. Thank you, again.
Woah.. this is amazing.. you are describing what was often a daily routine of mine.. and I'm sure of many others.. the struggle of being an emotional individual living in a concrete jungle in today's overcrowded and unapathetic societies and systems.. you're language is so descriptive and relatable.. powerful stuff. I love it, well done.